A lot to like here.
Musically this sounds great. That main melody is fantastic and really captures that Gouryella vibe. It actually reminds me a lot of Driftmoon's recent 'Tribe of the Sun' track (which was also inspired by Gouryella)
I think the drums and the bassline need a lot of work though. The drums feel way too simplistic, as does the bassline.
Go back and listen to some of the old Gouryella tracks. Ferry hardly ever uses an offbeat bassline, he'll come up with a bass rythm that compliments the rest of the track. He often uses that 16th note baseline with the offbeat note being an octave higher like on the original Gouryella track, the 1998 remix and on Tenshi. There is the mid-bass there, but it doesn't cut through enough to alter the rhythm of the track.
Overall, that melody is excellent, get a good bass and drums behind it and this will be a banger!