I'm loving it...Lovely sounds, lovely textures, lovely little snippets, nice vocals/theme. I enjoyed listening. Very dreamy, very atmospheric.
However: I just wouldn't call this a trance track...
It’s a very busy (but ultimately beautiful) ambient piece with a 4*4 kick drum here and there.
very 90's sounding an in a way reminds me a bit of the stuff System 7 used to make back then.
so, if your goal was to produce something like, say, this:
Then yeah! aside from minor things like the fact that drums/bass etc. lack emphasis/their own place in the mix a bit.... well done
however: if your goal was to make a trance-track or even a progressive trance track, Then I would recommend what i've recommended earlier, Pick a couple of (genuine) trance tracks. And rebuild them to the letter
. try to make literal carbon copies of them, from scratch, and don't "do your own thing" half way down the process... If you wish to master this particular skill (which is hard, can relate) you have to kill your darling
. Or as previous sensei of trance Armin van Buuren once put it: "don't get caught up in the bullshit of your own creativity"
When you've done that a couple of times and have a feel of arranging said tracks. i'd recommend making a trance- remix of this, based on the structures you've practiced on.
my two cents
(again, I enjoyed listening to this and probably will do more often)